Don't leave me..

SPOILERS
oh god.. i spent all day on this.. and you have no idea how proud i am...
So in Flame's past, Sweetly her sister dies from starvation.
and i wanted to add some ghostly effects so that's why sweetly is glowing.
i tried to make this look like an anime shot as best as i could.
It's raining so that's why flame is also glowing.
oh god. i love this so much!!!
anyway.... here's the paragraph on how sweetly dies. (wantstoseeificanmakeanyonecry)

Rain starts to pour on the two young cats, making the ground slippery. prey there has been so scarce and it isn't even winter. with poor hunting skills the two survive on little prey. Flame would try to give sweetly the most prey she could but she would refuse wanting to keep flame alive more than herself. suddenly, flame's ear's flicker to ear a loud thud and a splash behind her. "Sweetly!" her eyes clouded with fear as she looked at her sister. "I'll go hunting, you need strength your so weak.. we can hide in a cave, i think i spotted one ahead of us!" she nudged sweetly on the shoulder with her snout, all she heard was a little moan. Falme dragged her by the scruff pulling her as fast as she could, the ground under her became mud quickly making her paws drenched and sticky. Soon they hit a downhill with ricks. Flame slipped and fell, letting sweetly crash beside her. "Sweetly!!" Hurry we are almost there. all sweetly could do is just shake her head, quickly scanning her body to see her bones peak out of her drenched long fur body. "You need to leave me" Sweetly said, looking shocked Flame squeaked "No!" her throat started to tighten with sorrow. "i'm never going to leave you" Sweetly laid there pathetically, they laid there in the rain flame curling on sweetly, taking most of the rain. Tear's started to run down sweetly's face "Flame, i'm dieing.. you need to go.."

Guess what.. that's all you get cuz i'm evil (andlazy)

and i don't even think people read that. so.. would you mind to.... critique?